PHOTO PROMPT- ©Ted Strutz
The heat in Hal’s bar was oppressive. Greasy culinary stenches assaulted her nostrils.
‘Montezuma’s Revenge’ had wreaked havoc with her digestive system from the moment her clod-hopping feet had touched foreign ground and her ox-like shoulders were burned to a frazzle.
“Oh, do make an effort!” Her slim, elegant sister moaned.
“Just for once, why don’t you put yourself in my shoes?” she screeched. “I’m overweight, under-tall and have the grace of a behemoth. I feel shit, look shit and can do nothing but shit!”
“I think you are beautiful.”
She turned towards the velvety male voice and instantly rallied.
Word Count: 100
Written for Friday Fictioneers – a 100 words story based on a photo prompt. Hosted by Rochelle. Read the other entries here.
Clare Hempstead 
Interesting that the bar has a name, but she doesn’t. I liked that
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Thanks Neil. I always appreciate your thoughts.
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I hope better days are ahead of her, seems she is in a desperate need of happier times. I loved descriptions, not the everyday choice of attributes.
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Thanks very much. I think her future looks promising!
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Dear Clare,
I’d love to know where this story is headed. I wonder if she’s as overweight and undertall (love it) as she thinks she is. 😉 Great descriptions, particularly ‘greasy culinary stench.’ Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks Rochelle. I would like to think that she has met her Mr Wonderful! 🙂
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Undertall! Enjoyable read 🙂
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Thanks Graham. glad you liked it.
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There’s someone for everyone. Everyone. 🙂 I liked the sound of her.
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Thanks Sandra. I think she just needs someone to boost her confidence.
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Undertall also made me smile.
Be careful he might be preying on her weakness for love.
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I can’t decide if he is her perfect match or a controller who senses her vulnerability! Thanks for reading and commenting.
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I vote for the latter.
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I think it would make more drama if he were a cad!
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Anyone venturing a compliment in that situation is worth paying attention to — he’s earned it!
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I could smell that stench, and sympathise with your heroine even though I don’t have her problems. Clever of you to leave us wondering what she said.
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Thanks Liz. There are a variety of ways this could go.
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Hm, but where will it lead? I’m somewhat suspicious of his motives. It’s sad that she needs a man’s opinion to feel better about herself. Great story.
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Yes, it is sad, but she is vulnerable and lacking in confidence so is excited by any kind comment. It might have been better if it had been another woman’s voice.
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I loved “undertall,” well done 🙂
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Greetings, CH!
Lovely story. A familiar story but well told. Natural dialogue and a great end. Go get him, girl!
🙂 TMWR
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Thank you very much:)
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It is a gift to see yourself through the eyes of someone who thinks you are beautiful.
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Thanks for reading and commenting
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Lovely. Everyone is beautiful to someone 🙂
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He thinks she’s beautiful but he’s got to have ulterior motives. She should be careful. Nicely ambiguous story, and a great portrait of insecurity and vulnerability in the MC.
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I love this.
That’s it!
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Thanks for all your comments tonight!
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