His Story

I hope nobody minds, but I have done two this week.  Initially, I couldn’t get the story right.  I wrote, deleted and re-wrote countless times.  Then, very late at night it took shape, but I wanted to tell the story from two points of view.  If you have the time to read both, I hope you will see why I wanted to post the two sides.


PHOTO PROMPT © Lucy Fridkin

The sun crept across the clouds like molten lava lighting up the grey sky augmenting its tempestuous appearance.

It matched Peter’s mood as he reflected on the afternoon’s events.  His face distorted with fear.  He’d known the risks, but arrogantly thought they didn’t apply to him.  He’d always gambled and the gamble had always paid off… always; until today.

How could he face his wife, his father or his colleagues?

Stupid, senseless, fool!

His shoulders sagged dejectedly as he looked at the calm water below.  It provided the solution to his turmoil.  With newly-found serenity, he stepped off the ledge.

Word Count: 100

Written for Friday Fictioneers – a 100 words story based on a photo prompt. Hosted by Rochelle. Read the other entries here.


20 thoughts on “His Story

  1. michael1148humphris says:

    Sadly it is all to easy to run from the conscience of ones actions. If we had to stay and see what the outcome of what we do was – perhaps much of history would not be so grim?

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  2. gahlearner says:

    Depression clouds reason, it lies. Maybe desperation like this does, too. I’m not sure the knowledge of how much they hurt the ones they leave behind would stop people from killing themselves. I’m not sure they would believe it. The two stories are very strong together.


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