Reclamation


PHOTO PROMPT © Randy Mazie

The plants couldn’t read the scrawled graffiti warning not to trespass.  They would have ignored it even if they had been literate. 

Years of human destruction was going to be remedied.  The weeds grew eagerly, forcing their roots under the walls undermining the foundations.  Ivy followed insinuating its fronds into every tiny crevice then swelling to force the cracks wider.  These walls would crumble.  It would take a while, but nature would repossess the land.

The rambling rose raced up the walls, bursting open its splendid blooms as a triumphant celebration of the environment returning to its natural state.

Word Count: 99

Written for Friday Fictioneers – a 100 words story based on a photo prompt. Hosted by Rochelle. Read the other entries here.

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Review of Gone by Leona Deakin

This novel has a strong opening.  It drew me in quickly.  However, the idea of a game that people choose to join abandoning their normal lives is difficult to believe.  I can understand people looking for more information out of curiosity, but to leave their life to play a game is unrealistic.  Maybe if I were a psychopath I would understand it!

Seraphine is an interesting character and the description used in the opening scene of the aftermath of the initial event is well-written.  There is a good misdirection in this novel, which I won’t detail here as I do not want to give any spoilers to people who haven’t read it.

I hadn’t anticipated a twist late on, so that was a thought-provoking surprise and there are some interesting touches.

I have read many books recently that are extremely poorly edited and this, unfortunately, was no exception, which is surprising from a publisher such as Penguin Random House UK. What exactly do editors do for their salaries nowadays, because it isn’t editing?  It is little things like a missing hyphen, huge spaces mid-sentence, an asterisk at the start of a sentence for no fathomable reason – perhaps this is still a draft and the editing is yet to be done?

The chapters jump from one character’s point of view to another with no break to indicate the change.  This made me stumble and have to re-read each time.  In other places there were line spaces where there shouldn’t be, which lead to a stilted read.

There is a profound overuse of the word ‘elegant’ at one point.  If this was intentional, I can see no reason for it and again, it interrupted my reading flow.

Worth a read if you can get past the lack of editing and suspend belief over the storyline.